Well written. Suspense is created many times to keep me interested, then you give the relief of the suspense and we are on to the next part which builds to suspense.
I am amazed that you can tell such a life time long story in such few words.
I love the respect shown for your father.
I would enjoy more on the dynamic of power/authority sharing in your family. Didn't quite understand the brief reference to it.
The last paragraph could perhaps be expanded. The simplest expansion would be a "who" after the word girl. But I feel a little more info about the asking would increase the interest of the paragraph.
Thoroughly enjoyed reading. I'm also working on a Memoir.
Daniel 12/30/2018 4:15:00 PM